Comments for Briarcat's Thicket

Comment on DIY Kit Poem Day5 Rest by Minerva

Minerva — Sun, 08 Nov 2009 18:55:17 +0000

While I am not asleep, I am pleasantly soothed by this poem, really beautiful. I think my favorite passage (though it is hard to choose just one) is “rest is the grace note within creation”. I’m a sucker for musical references.

Comment on Nov6__Friday by Julie Jordan Scott

Julie Jordan Scott — Sun, 08 Nov 2009 15:09:59 +0000

Love this scent image:

>> smelling like the guts of worms, dead fish, and honeysuckle…

The price we pay for tromping about, eh?

Thanks for taking me along!

Comment on DIY Kit Poem Day5 Rest by barbara_y

barbara_y — Sun, 08 Nov 2009 06:09:46 +0000

Thanks. Was rather hoping it would put the reader to sleep

Comment on DIY Kit Poem Day5 Rest by rallentanda

rallentanda — Sun, 08 Nov 2009 06:02:06 +0000

This is a nice gentle little poem.

Comment on Nov6__Friday by Matthew

Matthew — Sun, 08 Nov 2009 04:38:54 +0000

The phrase “stay aways” really amused me for some reason.

And I agree about the end. Leaving the question of why unanswered feels like the right move to me.

Comment on Nov7__Saturday by Joseph Harker

Joseph Harker — Sat, 07 Nov 2009 21:28:37 +0000

There so many little ladybug-like things going on here that I love… “clustering and cloistering”, “tokyo or mars”, “disturb the earth”, etc. It’s longer than a haiku or something similar, but the same kind of snapshot illustration effect is happening. Prompt or no, it’s a cool verbal moment.

(And you’re lucky that your November is warm… last night it got down to 31 Fahrenheit at my parents’ house, where I am for the weekend. Most displeasing.)

Comment on Nov6__Friday by barbara_y

barbara_y — Sat, 07 Nov 2009 16:48:23 +0000

I was unsure about the end. There are two more lines that would explain it, but they also make it specific to the individual’s circumstances. This way it doesn’t become a poem about…..but instead is whatever you bring to it.

Comment on DIY. Kit Poem Day#3 by Linda Jacobs

Linda Jacobs — Sat, 07 Nov 2009 13:27:56 +0000

There is such an aliveness to this poem. It works on so many levels: as a picture of rural America, as a painting of colorful characters, as a comment on perspective, and as great entertainment!

I’ll be poking around your site to read more of your work!

Comment on DIY Kit Poem Day#2 by Linda Jacobs

Linda Jacobs — Sat, 07 Nov 2009 13:22:08 +0000

There is so much energy in this poem! It speeds along then slooooows dooooown, then speeds up again. Very creative and so well crafted. Love it!

Comment on Nov6__Friday by Linda Jacobs

Linda Jacobs — Sat, 07 Nov 2009 13:16:20 +0000

You’ve got some wonderful lines in here!

“singing moonshine tunes like nursery rhymes”

“we trailed anachronisms
in the wind behind our bikes
like disney girls without a problem
out of reach of common sense.”

I like the mysteriousness at the end, too.